Monday, June 29, 2009

Strange Short Story: Lessons

So i posted a short story over on AW. I got some good constructive criticism, and thankfully no outright 'never pick up a pen again' comments :) It needs alot of work (like all my writing) so here is my little recap on the lessons i got from the comments and critiques

#1 ellipses and their overuse! Again, Grammar!!

#2 i need to be more clear in what i'm trying to portray (i often leave people confused)
KISS (keep it simple stupid)

#3 definitely a better set up and maybe i should expand this idea more?

#4 Kill the cliches & repetition

#5 serious editing to improve delivery

#6 more about the characters - more of a 'feel'

#7 Really write different imagery/phrases - not even close to familiar writing.


Kori said...

Wow, so many journals! This just happened to be the one that looked most promising, so I decided to leave you a comment here in return for your comment on my journal.

First of all, thank you for taking the time to comment at all! I sometimes feel like the astronomers who fling radio signals out into space, hoping that they'll make contact with any aliens who have radio technology.

Also, I thought I should mention this; I read recently (somewhere) that 'voice' isn't found - if you write, you have your voice. If all you can do is string nonsense words together, you still have a particular voice. No one will read it, but you have one. So there's no need to 'find' your voice, or 'develop' it - it's already there. What you could work on is improving it, though, if you think it needs improvement.

Anyway, that's my two cents. And I had no idea Bram Stoker was Irish! Or that you were, for that matter. XD I'm technically Scottish by blood, but I'm American born and raised. One day, I'll get back over there. *looks fiercely determined* Ireland is such a beautiful country, too. I'm looking forward to visiting one day.

Danyelle said...

Drat that thing called Grammar!


It's hard to accept criticism. Kudos to you for making the criticism work for you. :D

Lady Glamis said...

Emily, KISS is my motto. I'm always overdoing stuff. Good for you for moving forward with this! This is how we all get better. :D

Jenna Alexander said...

It’s so hard to remove ourselves from a story enough to see what is missing. I’m sure it will take a lot of practice for me to do this. I’ve left out some pretty funny, necessary things.

That is why critique groups or beta readers are so great. They have no idea what you plan to say next or who your characters are.

For the most part I’ve found critique sites to be helpful. There was one time that I received a truly harsh review of one of my short stories. Yikes. I threw my jump drive of stories in a drawer and pouted for two days. The pouting turned to anger and determination. I didn’t want this person to be the one to stop me from pursuing this dream of mine. I revised the story a few more times, submitted it to a couple of epublishers and had it accepted to the second place I tried.

I have a lot of work to do and a lot of learning ahead of me.

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